Hi @coarsesalt 
A few topical comments:
"Empowering language:
On the course web page:
“In each of my classes the curriculum is, of course”
“In each of our classes” ?
Blog Post 1:
“and a strong focus on giving people specific things to do.”
“and a strong focus on learners selecting things to do”
Marketing / framing
- I <3 rhizomes. But what are they? And why is the structure different? Attractive? What urgent issue or trend does “rhizomatic” learning solve? I would put a bit there on defining a rhizome and a call to action. I like the bits of definition from this post (http://davecormier.com/edblog/2012/12/13/trying-to-write-rhizomatic-learning-in-300-words/) perhaps cull a bit from there?
- I know the sections will be filled in as you go, but I might start with some provocative questions. (Aside I seem to remember a post of yours about cheating as learning that I thought was great–but can’t find it now?) I might label each section with a provocative question, or list provocative questions in the buckets.
Learning design / community as curriculum
At any rate, I know we plan to connect tomorrow, but I wanted to draft ideas here.
